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Post by Party Boy Chris Mosh on Nov 6, 2016 23:29:23 GMT -5
Please give me some feedback on my RP, what to improve on and for you that have seen my RP's before you can also give me feedback but comment on how I have improved from when I first started
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Post by Jacob Wilson on Nov 7, 2016 4:28:48 GMT -5
What's the AU Arena?
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Post by emperobpalpaten on Nov 7, 2016 4:44:42 GMT -5
This was a pretty good re-introduction to the characters and what has changed over three years
If I had to give any advice it would be about expository dialogue and how you need to be real careful with how you use it. Chris andd Ashley are brother and sister, they don't need to explain their histories to each other. If you want to fill the reader in on something and it can't be done organically in a conversation because both characters are already aware of this information, don't be afraid to have the narrator cover that instead.
Besides that, it was full of Mosh-goodness and continued to play up the uber faceness of the character. Good work.
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